Portrait/correction

Portrait/correction
Message de xax0 posté le 06-04-2016 à 05:54:31 (S | E | F)
Hello !
Pouvez-vous corriger mon portrait s.v.p s'il vous plait?
Merci pour vos réponses.

Hello !
My name is x, I am a 17 year-old boy, medium-sized, with black hair and black eyes.
Although I'm rather shy, I am sometimes very extrovert with my friends.
Moreover I live and go to school in Saint-Denis, the capital city of the Reunion Island.
As far as I'm concerned, I'm very interested in sport, especially volleyball and handball, because it's very fun !
Yet, I also like going to the cinema with my friend.
Finally, I love animals.
Indeed, I have a cat and it is really adorable.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 06-04-2016 22:53

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Réponse: Portrait/correction de gerondif, postée le 06-04-2016 à 22:39:54 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Hello !
My name is x, I am a 17 year-old boy, medium-sized, with black hair and black eyes. (normalement on dit dark hair pour les cheveux mais black se trouve, y compris dans des manuels scolaires)
Although I'm rather shy, I am sometimes very extrovert (existe comme adjectif, ce qui m'a surpris.) with my friends.
Moreover I live and go to school in Saint-Denis, the capital city of the Reunion Island.
As far as I'm concerned, I'm very interested in sport (souvent au pluriel), especially volleyball and handball, because it's very (very précède un adjectif, or fun est un nom, donc, it's a lot of fun)fun !
Yet, I also like going to the cinema with my friend (un seul alors?).
Finally, I love animals.

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Réponse: Portrait/correction de xax0, postée le 07-04-2016 à 13:31:55 (S | E)
Bonjour et merci pour votre réponse !

Hello !
My name is x, I am a 17 year-old boy, medium-sized, with dark hair and black eyes.
Although I'm rather shy, I am sometimes very extrovert with my friends.
Moreover I live and go to school in Saint-Denis, the capital city of the Reunion Island.
As far as I'm concerned, I'm very interested in sports, especially volleyball and handball, because it's a lot offun !
Yet, I also like going to the cinema with my friends.
Finally, I love animals.
Indeed, I have a cat and it is really adorable.

C'est bon à présent ?

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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-04-2016 13:49

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Réponse: Portrait/correction de xax0, postée le 07-04-2016 à 13:34:31 (S | E)
Ps : ici je peux employer "extrovert" ou pas ?
Sinon par quoi pourrais-je le remplacer ?
Merci.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-04-2016 13:49

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Réponse: Portrait/correction de gerondif, postée le 07-04-2016 à 14:42:04 (S | E)
Hello,

My name is x, I am a 17 year-old boy, medium-sized, with dark hair and black eyes.
Although I'm rather shy, I am sometimes very extrovert with my friends.
Bon, extrovert me surprend, j'aurais mis extroverted, ou outgoing, ou outspoken.....
Moreover I live and go to school in Saint-Denis, the capital city of the Reunion Island.
As far as I'm concerned, I'm very interested in sports, especially volleyball and handball, because it's a lot of fun !
Yet, I also like going to the cinema with my friends.
Finally, I love animals.
Indeed, I have a cat and it is really adorable. (Ce indeed fait très académique! J'aurais juste relié: I love animals and I do have a cat. She is really adorable (souvent les britanniques féminisent leurs matous!)

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Réponse: Portrait/correction de xax0, postée le 07-04-2016 à 18:50:35 (S | E)
Hello,

My name is x, I am a 17 year-old boy, medium-sized, with dark hair and black eyes.
Although I'm rather shy, I am sometimes very extroverted with my friends.
Moreover I live and go to school in Saint-Denis, the capital city of the Reunion Island.
As far as I'm concerned, I'm very interested in sports, especially volleyball and handball, because it's a lot of fun !
Yet, I also like going to the cinema with my friends.
Finally, I love animals and I do have a cat.
She is really adorable

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