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Message de chlcorp posté le 07-02-2016 à 23:18:39 (S | E | F)
Tout d'abord Bonjour/soir à tous ,
J'ai un exposé en groupe à préparer sur les changements sociaux en Angleterre durant les années 60 et j'aurais besoin de votre aide pour corriger la partie que je présente ci-dessous, il est évident que je posterai la correction afin de remplir mon devoir envers la communauté

Social and regional inequalities:
One of the main goals of the Wilsonian Labour government is to reduce the economical, cultural and social inequalities. To do so, the government maintained the Welfare State despite the multiple budget cuts. The legal measure taken between 1964 and 1967 were unarguably in the direction of strengthening social aids, with a reorganization of Social security, set up in the 40s, put under a minister of Social Security according to the Ministry of Social Security Act. The old Social Welfare is replaced by “Supplementary benefits”, a more generous version of it. These measures unmistakably caused a great drop in poverty.
At the beginning of the decade, precariousness touched around 8 millions Britains, but thanks to the redistributing effect of taxes and the welfare made the numbers drop down to 2 millions.
But unfortunately, the differences of wealth and incomes inequalities were far from disappearing, due to Britannic society’s constancy, which was always very hierarchic in its social classes. Behind the equalization of incomes by taxes and the standardization of wage-earner, the hierarchy of fortune globally maintained itself.
Chances for a worker’s child to access lower middle class are ½, but only 1/9 to access middle class. This situation was even harder for female workers, whom had a lower salary than male workers.
The regional contrast increased during the sixties, which slightly made appear a three tier United Kingdom,
Ones with high standards of living noticeably London, the South East, West and Midlands. Other ones with middle standards, like the South West and the Wales. And the last ones with low standards, such as the North East, Scotland and North Ireland, in those last regions we can find workers who beneficiate welfare.

Leisure activities
Despite the persisting economic difficulties and inequalities, the society of leisure and entertainment expands itself fully during the sixties thanks to the increase of purchasing power and reduction in working time.
Sociological studies have shown a “privatization” of leisure amongst the workers. Less outgoings, such as football matches and pubs (Manchester, Liverpool or Leeds remain an exception), cinemas and music halls, but more home-linked leisures, like cooking, doing DIY, gardening, TV, reading. This privatization led to a very high demand therefore an high demand.
However, all those new leisures are not all consumer activities. For example, gambling, which became a national industry generating between £ 750 and 1000 millions depending the years.
The consumption of teenagers took off rapidly too. In this sector, the American socio-cultural model prevails with the identification to rock and cinema celebrities.
The young ones make the ready-to-wear, discography and electronic industries skyrocket by buying jeans, miniskirts, vinyl, radios and record players.
Since the first paid holidays in the 30s, holidays became one the main symbols of the civilization of leisures. Around 1964, more than 60% of the population took at least one holiday week. Foreign holidays developed more than continent ones with 5 millions British tourists in 1966 visiting a foreign country. The touristic sector became a true service industry thanks to the touristic boom of the 60s.

Je vous souhaite une agréable soirée ou journée, merci d'avance, et mes plus plates excuses si le texte est trop long.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-02-2016 08:03



Réponse: Swinging60s/exposé de delf2312, postée le 08-02-2016 à 19:02:07 (S | E)
Bonjour,
C'est bien , vous avez un bon niveau de langue. Attention juste au temps, en anglais, le présent de narration n'est pas aussi répandu qu'en français. S'il s'agit d'un exposé oral, n'oubliez pas que la prononciation, intonation etc... est le plus important.

Social and regional inequalities:
One of the main goals of the Wilsonian Labour government is (tense) to reduce the economical, cultural and social inequalities. To do so, the government maintained the Welfare State despite the multiple budget cuts. The legal measure taken between 1964 and 1967 were unarguably in the direction of strengthening social aids, with a reorganization of Social security, set up in the 40s, put under a minister of Social Security according to the Ministry of Social Security Act. The old Social Welfare is replaced by “Supplementary benefits”, a more generous version of it. These measures unmistakably caused a great drop in poverty.
At the beginning of the decade, precariousness touched around 8 millions (on dit millions of Brits mais X million Brits) Britains, but thanks to the redistributing effect of taxes and the welfare (probleme de syntaxe) made the numbers drop down to 2 millions.
But unfortunately, the differences of wealth and incomes inequalities were far from disappearing, due to the Britannic (British ?)society’s constancy, which wastense, on fait un bilan dans le passé > pluperfect) always very hierarchic in its social classes. (very attached to its hierarchical order ?) Behind the equalization of incomes by taxes and the standardization of wage-earner, the hierarchy of fortune globally maintained itself.
Chances for a worker’s child to access lower middle class are tense ½, but only 1/9 to access middle class. This situation was even harder for female workers, whom had a lower salary than male workers.
The regional contrast increased during the sixties, which slightly made appear (je crois qu'on ne peut pas traduire faire apparaître mot à mot) a three tier (I don't understand ? United Kingdom,
Ones with high standards of living noticeably London, the South East, West and Midlands. Other ones with middle standards, like the South West and the Wales. And the last ones with low standards, such as the North East, Scotland and Northern Ireland, in those last regions we can find workers who beneficiate (tense+voc) welfare.

Leisure activities
Despite the persisting economic difficulties and inequalities, the society of leisure and entertainment expands itself fully during the sixties thanks to the increase of purchasing power and reduction in working time.
Sociological studies have shown a “privatization” of leisure amongst the workers. Less outgoings, such as football matches and pubs (Manchester, Liverpool or Leeds remain an exception), cinemas and music halls, but more home-linked leisures, like cooking, doing DIY, gardening, TV, reading. This privatization led to a very high demand therefore an high demand.(il manque un mot ?)
However, all those new leisures are not all consumer activities. For example, gambling, which became a national industry generating between £ 750 and 1000 millions depending the years.
The consumption of teenagers took off rapidly too. In this sector, the American socio-cultural model prevails (tense) with the identification to rock and cinema celebrities.
The young ones make (tense) the ready-to-wear, discography and electronic industries skyrocket by buying jeans, miniskirts, vinyl, radios and record players.
Since the first paid holidays in the 30s, holidays became one the main symbols of the civilization of leisures. Around 1964, more than 60% of the population took at least one holiday week. Foreign holidays developed more than continental ones with 5 millions British tourists in 1966 visiting a foreign country. The touristic sector became a true service industry thanks to the touristic boom of the 60s.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 08-02-2016 19:21



Réponse: Swinging60s/exposé de chlcorp, postée le 08-02-2016 à 19:35:57 (S | E)
Bonsoir et merci de votre réponse rapide, voici le texte corrigé :

Social and regional inequalities:
One of the main goals of the Wilsonian Labour government was to reduce the economic, cultural and social inequalities. To do so, the government maintained the Welfare State despite the multiple budget cuts. The legal measure taken between 1964 and 1967 were unarguably in the direction of strengthening social aids, with a reorganization of Social security, set up in the 40s, put under a minister of Social Security according to the Ministry of Social Security Act. The old Social Welfare was replaced by “Supplementary benefits”, a more generous version of it. These measures unmistakably caused a great drop in poverty.
At the beginning of the decade, precariousness touched around 8 million brits, but thanks to the redistributing effect of taxes and welfare, the numbers dropped down to 2 million.
But unfortunately, the differences of wealth and incomes inequalities were far from disappearing, due to the British society’s constancy, which had always been very attached to its hierarchical order. Behind the equalization of incomes by taxes and the standardization of wage-earner, the hierarchy of fortune globally maintained itself.
Chances for a worker’s child to access lower middle class were ½, but only 1/9 to access middle class. This situation was even harder for female workers, who had a lower salary than male workers.
The regional contrast increased during the sixties, which slightly created a three speed United Kingdom,
Ones with high standards of living, noticeably London, the South East, West and Midlands. Other ones with middle standards, like the South West and Wales. And the last ones with low standards, such as the North-East, Scotland and Northern Ireland, in those last regions we can find workers who benefited from welfare.

Leisure activities
Despite the persisting economic difficulties and inequalities, the society of leisure and entertainment expands itself fully during the sixties thanks to the increase of purchasing power and reduction in working time.
Sociological studies have shown a “privatization” of leisure amongst the workers. Less outgoings, such as football matches and pubs (Manchester, Liverpool or Leeds remain an exception), cinemas and music halls, but more home-linked leisure, like cooking, doing DIY, gardening, TV, reading. This privatization led to a very high demand therefore a very high offer.
However, all those new leisure activities are not all consumer activities. For example, gambling, which became a national industry generating between £ 750 and 1000 million depending the years.
The consumption of teenagers took off rapidly too. In this sector, the American socio-cultural model prevailed with the identification to rock and cinema celebrities.
The young ones made the ready-to-wear, discography and electronic industries skyrocket by buying jeans, miniskirts, vinyl, radios and record players.
Since the first paid holidays in the 30s, holidays became one the main symbols of the British leisure-oriented society. Around 1964, more than 60% of the population took at least one holiday week. Foreign holidays developed more than continental ones with 5 million British tourists in 1966 visiting a foreign country. The touristic sector became a true service industry thanks to the touristic boom of the 60s.




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