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Message from zihaowang posted on 10-10-2013 at 10:26:28 (D | E | F)
Hello,
Please help me to correct the composition below.
Many thanks in advance.
The bar chart shows the changes of sales in 3 different areas(Game software, Cds, DVD or video) in those 4 years(from 2000 to 2003).
The volume of sale of CDs kept a highest postion of sales, though this figure indicated a slow drop among those 4 years. In contrust, a significant increase was found in the sale colume of DVD/Vido over the same period(from less than 20 $bn to 31 $bn ). This number for Games software also suffered a moderate rise (19 $bn in 2003, 15 $bn in 2000).
CDs owns the strongest purchasing power, which palyed an absolute lead role among media productions and hold about double times than DVD/Video, three times than Games software in 2000. CDs and DVDs, though, still less share than CDs in 2003, but manifested an impressive captitiveness
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Edited by lucile83 on 10-10-2013 10:47
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Message from zihaowang posted on 10-10-2013 at 10:26:28 (D | E | F)
Hello,
Please help me to correct the composition below.
Many thanks in advance.
The bar chart shows the changes of sales in 3 different areas(Game software, Cds, DVD or video) in those 4 years(from 2000 to 2003).
The volume of sale of CDs kept a highest postion of sales, though this figure indicated a slow drop among those 4 years. In contrust, a significant increase was found in the sale colume of DVD/Vido over the same period(from less than 20 $bn to 31 $bn ). This number for Games software also suffered a moderate rise (19 $bn in 2003, 15 $bn in 2000).
CDs owns the strongest purchasing power, which palyed an absolute lead role among media productions and hold about double times than DVD/Video, three times than Games software in 2000. CDs and DVDs, though, still less share than CDs in 2003, but manifested an impressive captitiveness
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Edited by lucile83 on 10-10-2013 10:47
We don't work on external links.Anyway you have written the text.
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