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Message de joattack posté le 05-05-2013 à 15:48:37 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
J'avais un article de journal à rédiger en anglais sur O'Brien and son roman Buffalo for the broken heart.
Merci d'avance pour votre correction
The man who changed his life after falling in love with buffalo …
A difficult start in agriculture...
Dan O’Brien was born in November, 23, 1947 in Ohio (USA). From the days of his youth, he declared a real interest in nature, animals and the Great Plains, a vast expanse of grassland reaching from Mexico far north into Canada. This is reason why he settled in South Dakota in 1970 and began unfortunately a difficult life trying to raise cattle in the hills of South Dakota. For twenty years, he battled drought, overgrazed pastures, and cattle prices to make ends meet on his cattle ranch accumulating debts but he never lost his fierce love of the Great Plains.
…But one day, love at first sight
Indeed, when in January 1998, O’Brien recently divorced is invited by a neighboring buffalo rancher to lend a hand at the annual buffalo round-up, he discovers these impressive creatures and it is love at first sight. Seeds are planted for converting his own ranch from cattle to buffalo. Despite of the considerable financial risk, he sells his cows and purchases thirteen “short-necked, golden balls of wool” as he said. The rancher raises more than a few eyebrows locally when he introduces bison in the place of cows but he justifies his decisions in these words: “The difference between cattle and buffalo is obvious enough for anyone to see”. Indeed, he is just right since cattle’s ranching is environmentally devastating in the context of Great Plains. Buffalo require little water, are less picky eaters than cows, and move around as they browse (so they don’t graze a patch of grass down to the roots). From thirteen buffalo “runts” to a herd of 100, O’Brien eventually succeed in his enterprise but he is always realistic and knows that financial problems can come back.
A rancher and environmentalist but also a writer
English teacher, O’Brien is also passionate about literature and writing. After seven books, he published in 2007 Buffalo for the broken heart, a book acclaimed by critics. Indeed, O’Brien, a writer possessed of “a keen and poetic eye” (The New York Times Book Review) combines a novelist’s eye for detail with a naturalist’s understanding to realize an account of the buffaloes first season on the ranch, to create a enriching, entertaining narrative . The reader is invited to share beautiful moments on the Great Plains as the thrill of watching a falcon home in on its prey or the comical spectacle of a buffalo wallowing in the mud but especially O’Brien life on the plains: his growing herd of buffalo or his experiences with neighbors. Moreover, the novelist show us the relationship symbiotic between animals and the prairie and the difficulties of raising cattle “sort of ungulate tourist” ill-suited to the landscape unlike buffalo which has a natural survivability superior to that of cattle in this environment. To conclude we can say that this book illustrates perfectly the power of a dream and how life becomes infinitely richer when we dare to follow one.
For more information about O’Brien and his beautiful project, you can visit his website: Lien internet
The Victor Hugo Times
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-05-2013 19:02
Message de joattack posté le 05-05-2013 à 15:48:37 (S | E | F)
Bonjour à tous,
J'avais un article de journal à rédiger en anglais sur O'Brien and son roman Buffalo for the broken heart.
Merci d'avance pour votre correction
The man who changed his life after falling in love with buffalo …
A difficult start in agriculture...
Dan O’Brien was born in November, 23, 1947 in Ohio (USA). From the days of his youth, he declared a real interest in nature, animals and the Great Plains, a vast expanse of grassland reaching from Mexico far north into Canada. This is reason why he settled in South Dakota in 1970 and began unfortunately a difficult life trying to raise cattle in the hills of South Dakota. For twenty years, he battled drought, overgrazed pastures, and cattle prices to make ends meet on his cattle ranch accumulating debts but he never lost his fierce love of the Great Plains.
…But one day, love at first sight
Indeed, when in January 1998, O’Brien recently divorced is invited by a neighboring buffalo rancher to lend a hand at the annual buffalo round-up, he discovers these impressive creatures and it is love at first sight. Seeds are planted for converting his own ranch from cattle to buffalo. Despite of the considerable financial risk, he sells his cows and purchases thirteen “short-necked, golden balls of wool” as he said. The rancher raises more than a few eyebrows locally when he introduces bison in the place of cows but he justifies his decisions in these words: “The difference between cattle and buffalo is obvious enough for anyone to see”. Indeed, he is just right since cattle’s ranching is environmentally devastating in the context of Great Plains. Buffalo require little water, are less picky eaters than cows, and move around as they browse (so they don’t graze a patch of grass down to the roots). From thirteen buffalo “runts” to a herd of 100, O’Brien eventually succeed in his enterprise but he is always realistic and knows that financial problems can come back.
A rancher and environmentalist but also a writer
English teacher, O’Brien is also passionate about literature and writing. After seven books, he published in 2007 Buffalo for the broken heart, a book acclaimed by critics. Indeed, O’Brien, a writer possessed of “a keen and poetic eye” (The New York Times Book Review) combines a novelist’s eye for detail with a naturalist’s understanding to realize an account of the buffaloes first season on the ranch, to create a enriching, entertaining narrative . The reader is invited to share beautiful moments on the Great Plains as the thrill of watching a falcon home in on its prey or the comical spectacle of a buffalo wallowing in the mud but especially O’Brien life on the plains: his growing herd of buffalo or his experiences with neighbors. Moreover, the novelist show us the relationship symbiotic between animals and the prairie and the difficulties of raising cattle “sort of ungulate tourist” ill-suited to the landscape unlike buffalo which has a natural survivability superior to that of cattle in this environment. To conclude we can say that this book illustrates perfectly the power of a dream and how life becomes infinitely richer when we dare to follow one.
For more information about O’Brien and his beautiful project, you can visit his website: Lien internet
The Victor Hugo Times
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-05-2013 19:02
Réponse: Correction/Article de journal de notrepere, postée le 05-05-2013 à 18:10:57 (S | E)
HelloDan O’Brien was born in
November, 23, 1947 in Ohio (USA). From the days of his youth, he declared a real interest in nature, animals and the Great Plains, a vast expanse of grassland reaching from Mexico far north into Canada. This is reason why he settled in South Dakota in 1970 and began, unfortunately, a difficult life trying to raise cattle in the hills of South Dakota. For twenty years, he battled drought, overgrazed pastures, and cattle prices to make ends meet on his cattle ranch accumulating debts but he never lost his fierce love of the Great Plains.…But one day, love at first sight
Indeed, when in January 1998, O’Brien, recently divorced, was invited by a neighboring buffalo rancher to lend a hand at the annual buffalo round-up, he discovered these impressive creatures and it was love at first sight. Seeds were(1) planted for converting his own ranch from cattle to buffalo. Despite of the considerable financial risk, he sells(1) his cows and purchases(1) thirteen “short-necked, golden balls of wool” as he said. The rancher raises(1) more than a few eyebrows locally when he introduces(1) bison in the place of cows but he justifies(1) his decisions in these words: “The difference between cattle and buffalo is obvious enough for anyone to see”. Indeed, he is just right since cattle’s ranching is environmentally devastating in the context of Great Plains. Buffalo require little water, are less picky eaters than cows, and move around as they browse (so they don’t graze a patch of grass down to the roots). From thirteen buffalo “runts” to a herd of 100, O’Brien eventually succeed(1) in his enterprise but he is(1) always realistic and knows(1) that financial problems can(1) come back.
A rancher and environmentalist but also a writer
English teacher, O’Brien is(1) also passionate about literature and writing. After seven books, he published
ill-suited to the landscape unlike buffalo which has a natural survivability superior to that of cattle in this environment. To conclude we can say that this book illustrates perfectly the power of a dream and how life becomes infinitely richer when we dare to follow one.(1) temps de narration; past tense
Réponse: Correction/Article de journal de joattack, postée le 05-05-2013 à 20:24:22 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour votre correction mais pour le troisième paragraphe ne pensez-vous pas que le présent simple soit le temps à utiliser car l'auteur
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Modifié par lucile83 le 05-05-2013 22:46
Réponse: Correction/Article de journal de notrepere, postée le 05-05-2013 à 22:33:56 (S | E)
Hello
Yes, the third paragraph can be in present tense, especially since the author is still alive.
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