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Message de juliel24 posté le 28-04-2013 à 10:33:28 (S | E | F)
Je suis partie en Ecosse en mars avec ma classe et, en tant que rédactrice en chef de notre "magazine post-voyage", je dois rédiger l'édito. Je pense l'avoir fini mais si quelqu'un pouvait y jeter un coup d'oeil pour le corriger...
Thank you in advance!
"Tuesday, the 4th of September, back to school. Just a few words about a trip from our new head teacher and questions already mount up. Everyone searches for more informations, the destination becomes the topic of all conversation, but remains a mystery. Just a few words from our new English teacher and we guess that we are going to go to Scotland. Sheeps, green, bagpipes, whisky: we all have ideas about Scotland and we are very excited about visiting the country of Harry Potter, Braveheart and Macbeth.
Wednesday, the 20th of September, arrival at the airport. Neither of us realizes that, in less than two hours, we will be in Edinburgh, wrapped up in our coat and wondering about the host families and their cooking skills. We enjoy the sunshine for the last time until our return and our pullover are still in our suitcase.
Scotland, an awesome week. Visits, laughing fits, marriage proposal… From Hadrian’s wall to Primark through Loch Lhomond and Glasgow, this trip remains indescribable…"
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-04-2013 11:08
Message de juliel24 posté le 28-04-2013 à 10:33:28 (S | E | F)
Je suis partie en Ecosse en mars avec ma classe et, en tant que rédactrice en chef de notre "magazine post-voyage", je dois rédiger l'édito. Je pense l'avoir fini mais si quelqu'un pouvait y jeter un coup d'oeil pour le corriger...
Thank you in advance!
"Tuesday, the 4th of September, back to school. Just a few words about a trip from our new head teacher and questions already mount up. Everyone searches for more informations, the destination becomes the topic of all conversation, but remains a mystery. Just a few words from our new English teacher and we guess that we are going to go to Scotland. Sheeps, green, bagpipes, whisky: we all have ideas about Scotland and we are very excited about visiting the country of Harry Potter, Braveheart and Macbeth.
Wednesday, the 20th of September, arrival at the airport. Neither of us realizes that, in less than two hours, we will be in Edinburgh, wrapped up in our coat and wondering about the host families and their cooking skills. We enjoy the sunshine for the last time until our return and our pullover are still in our suitcase.
Scotland, an awesome week. Visits, laughing fits, marriage proposal… From Hadrian’s wall to Primark through Loch Lhomond and Glasgow, this trip remains indescribable…"
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-04-2013 11:08
Réponse: Correction /édito magazine de delf2312, postée le 28-04-2013 à 11:32:24 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Pas mal !
"Tuesday, the 4th of September, back to school. Just a few words about a trip from our new head teacher and questions already mount up. Everyone searches (j'aurais utilisé la forme en ING) for more informations (information = collectif/indénombrable pluriel, pas besoin de /s/, on ne peut pas dire one information, two informations) , the destination becomes the topic of all conversation (là par contre il faudra un [s], but remains a mystery. Just a few words from our new English teacher and we guess that we are going to go to Scotland. Sheeps (il s'agit d'une des rare exceptions en anglais : le pluriel de sheep est irrégulier c'est sheep), green, bagpipes, whisky: we all have ideas about Scotland and we are very excited about visiting the country of Harry Potter (Harry Potter est Écossais ?), Braveheart and Macbeth.
Wednesday, the 20th of September (I think you mean March ?), arrival at the airport. Neither (neither est correct si vous n'êtes que 2. Si plus de deux personnes : Neither > none) of us realizes that, in less than two hours, we will be in Edinburgh, wrapped up in our coat and wondering about the host families and their cooking skills. We enjoy the sunshine for the last time until our return and our pullover (je n'ai jamais entendu un anglais utilisé ce mot: ils disent jumpers) are still in our suitcase (luggage est un nom indénombrable mais pas suitcase).
Scotland, an awesome week. Visits, laughing fits, marriage proposal… From Hadrian’s wall to Primark through Loch Lhomond and Glasgow, this trip remains indescribable…"
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Modifié par lucile83 le 28-04-2013 11:59
Cette correction n'est pas très fiable
Réponse: Correction /édito magazine de juliel24, postée le 28-04-2013 à 20:29:12 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup!
(et oui, Harry Potter est bien Ecossais
)Réponse: Correction /édito magazine de gnanga, postée le 29-04-2013 à 17:41:15 (S | E)
Hello, I have a few things to add:
Tuesday, the 4th of September, back to school. Just a few words about a trip with our new head teacher and questions already mount up. Everyone searches for more informations, the destination becomes le temps generalement utlisé lors d'une description ou autres résumé est le past simple donc became serait mieux) the topic of all conversation, but remains a mystery. Just a few words of our new English teacher and we guess that we are went to Scotland. Sheep, green, bagpipes, whisky: All of us have ideas about Scotland and we are very excited about visiting the country of Harry Potter, Braveheart and Macbeth.
Wednesday, the 20th of September, arrival at the airport. None of us realized that, in less than two hours, we have to be in Edinburgh, wrapped up in our coat and wondering about the host families and their cooking skills. We enjoyed the sunshine for the last time until our return and our pullover are still in our suitcase.
Scotland, an awesome week. Visiting,laughing fits, marriage proposal… From Hadrian’s wall to Primark through Loch Lhomond and Glasgow, this trip remains fantastic.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 29-04-2013 17:47
Merci pour votre participation mais il est préférable de signaler les fautes, et d'apporter son aide plutôt que de faire le travail qui n'aura plus qu'à être recopié.
Ce serait très gentil de votre part de tenir compte de cela la prochaine fois.
Cordialement.
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