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Message de klairou posté le 07-02-2013 à 16:00:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'ai rédigé un texte en anglais mais j'aimerais savoir s'il contient encore des fautes ou si les phrases sont encore trop "frenchies".
Pouvez-vous s'il vous plait me montrer où sont mes fautes dans mon texte? et je tenterai de les corriger...
Merci beaucoup!
Voici le texte :
In 1953, Watson and Crick managed to solve the DNA structure. However, the Balasubramanian's team disrupted the DNA dogma by discovering a four-stranded structure unique to cancer cells. I think it is a revolutionary discovery: it remains the sixty old DNA dogma and it is also a hope to beat cancer.
Furthermore, current treatments like radiotherapies are damaging cancer cells but also healthy cells, which is a very bad drawback. For example, when treatments are targeting enzymes responsible of dividing cells, they are also targeting healthy dividing cells like blood cells or hair bulb cells.
Balasubramanian's team work opens onto a way to target the cancer cells only ; by creating a treatment which kills the cells with the quadruple helix DNA, saving the healthy cells which have only a double helix DNA. Now - a -day, the problem of " targeting treatment" is that there is only one treatment for only one cancer (a patient with different cancer can't have this kind of treatment), whereas a treatment which is targeting quadruple helix DNA can cure all kind of treatment.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-02-2013 16:30
Message de klairou posté le 07-02-2013 à 16:00:09 (S | E | F)
Bonjour !
J'ai rédigé un texte en anglais mais j'aimerais savoir s'il contient encore des fautes ou si les phrases sont encore trop "frenchies".
Pouvez-vous s'il vous plait me montrer où sont mes fautes dans mon texte? et je tenterai de les corriger...
Merci beaucoup!
Voici le texte :
In 1953, Watson and Crick managed to solve the DNA structure. However, the Balasubramanian's team disrupted the DNA dogma by discovering a four-stranded structure unique to cancer cells. I think it is a revolutionary discovery: it remains the sixty old DNA dogma and it is also a hope to beat cancer.
Furthermore, current treatments like radiotherapies are damaging cancer cells but also healthy cells, which is a very bad drawback. For example, when treatments are targeting enzymes responsible of dividing cells, they are also targeting healthy dividing cells like blood cells or hair bulb cells.
Balasubramanian's team work opens onto a way to target the cancer cells only ; by creating a treatment which kills the cells with the quadruple helix DNA, saving the healthy cells which have only a double helix DNA. Now - a -day, the problem of " targeting treatment" is that there is only one treatment for only one cancer (a patient with different cancer can't have this kind of treatment), whereas a treatment which is targeting quadruple helix DNA can cure all kind of treatment.
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Modifié par lucile83 le 07-02-2013 16:30
Réponse: Correction /DNA structure de notrepere, postée le 07-02-2013 à 17:21:48 (S | E)
BonjourVotre texte se comprend, mais quelques tournures me sonnent bizzzarrres.
In 1953, Watson and Crick managed to solve the structure of DNA
the DNA dogma by discovering a four-stranded structure unique to cancer cells. I think it is a revolutionary discovery: it remains the sixty old DNA dogma and it is also a hope to beating cancer.Furthermore, current treatments like radiotherapies are not only damaging to cancer cells but also healthy cells, which is a very bad drawback
(side effect). For example, when treatments are targeting enzymes responsible Balasubramanian's team work opens
onto a way to target the cancer cells only ; by creating a treatment which kills the cells with the quadruple helix DNA, saving the healthy cells which have only a double helix DNA. Now - a -day
, the problem of " targeting treatment" is that there is only one treatment for only one cancer (a patient with a different cancer can't have this kind of treatment), whereas a treatment which is targeting (present simple) quadruple helix DNA can cure all kinds of treatment. Réponse: Correction /DNA structure de bluestar, postée le 07-02-2013 à 18:19:50 (S | E)
Bonjour....
In 1953, Watson and Crick managed to solve discover the DNA structure.
.. they are also targeting damaging healthy dividing cells like blood cells or hair bulb cells. (it's inadvertent so 'targeting' is the wrong word here)
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